Delilah in the Dark
Delilah slipped into the small spaces between the rocks of
the abandoned coal mine at the back of her families hundred acres. She wasn’t supposed to be here, or even know
about it, but much to her mother’s chagrin Delilah had a deep love for dark spaces. The girl wiggled her way through a tight
space between rocks before dropping into an open chamber that was littered with
thick spider webs and the bones of birds who lost their way.
The girl flicked on the flashlight that she had stolen from
under the sink of the old farmhouse. The old metal Maglite illuminated the mine,
showing a bend just a few hundred yards away.
Delilah didn’t actually need the flashlight for this portion of her
adventure, her feet new the twists of the passages by heart: twenty steps to
the bend, one-hundred and three to the Y and another 500 on the left-hand path
to find the collapse point that took the lives of one hundred men.
Today she wasn’t interested in the well-worn paths. Today she would explore the right-hand
path. Delilah would never admit to cowardice,
but she had not exactly unconsciously avoided the other half of the underground
labyrinth that had become a second home for her. Her parents were not the superstitious type
and had raised the young woman with their same sense of practicality, but
none-the-less Delilah could never shake the sense of something watching her when
she approached the right-hand of the Y.
Today she decided that she would ignore the hairs that
raised on the back of her neck, and the goosebumps that graced her arms and
started down a path she wasn’t sure she would be welcome on. A cool breeze ruffled her hair as she walked
further into the darkness; an odd sensation in a place where the air was always
stagnant. Curiosity about the source of
the fresh air pulled her further down the path, far past where she had intended
to turn around and far past the distance she thought the mine could go. Hypnotized by darkness she let her feet carry
her until her trusty Maglite began to flicker.
Still, something pulled her forward and when the light flickered out for
the last time, she dropped it. The metal
clattering silently to the barren floor. The breeze pulled her onward as her
hand traced the curved wall of the tunnel.
Delilah lost track of time in the darkness until the sound
of water pulled her from her trance. She
was surprised to find that her throat ached from dryness and her legs shook
from exhaustion. Having no other choice,
she continued toward the source of the sound.
She stumbled as she rounded a corner into a light-filled
crystal cave. The underground river that
she had heard spilled from an emerald pool and cascaded down into the darkness. As unexpected as the sudden light was, the
creatures occupying the space around the pool were even more of a surprise. Their small black eyes seemed oblivious to
her presence, but one-by-one they lifted their star-shaped noses and turned
their heads in her direction.
One such creature, its eyes opaque with age, beckoned Delilah
towards them. The girl approached
slowly, she was ashamed that she felt so skittish around what she could only
describe as mole people. When she closed
the distance the old, what Delilah thought was woman, took her hand in their
own paddle like paws and led her to the stream.
The clear water showed a reflection that Delilah almost didn’t
recognize. Her blond hair had taken on the
gossamer quality of cobwebs and her skin was chalk white beneath the dirt of
her journey. Most disturbingly her sky-blue
eyes had been lost as the blackness of her pupils extended to the whites. Not being able to help herself, Delilah
dipped her hands into the cool pond and took a deep drink. The water tasted like cold mountains and
summer heat. She looked back to the Mole
person they once again took her hand and led her another opening into the
darkness and pointed.
“I should go that way,” asked Delilah.
The old mole nodded once and gently pushed her down the
path. Again, the young woman walked
blindly into the darkness.
Just as abruptly as she had found the crystal cave, she heard
bones crunching beneath her feet and knew she was back where she started.
I liked the creepiness here. Delilah is a tough cookie to go on in total darkness after her light goes out! I also liked the ambiguous ending, not really knowing whether it was magic or a dream or what. Concrit: Some proofreading would make this easier to read (e.g. "knew" instead of "new"; "family's"/families, etc.).
ReplyDeleteYes, proof reading would help this one, but I wrote it about an hour before the week closed, oops.
DeleteNice job with rising tension. The story seems to start at the third paragraph when she decides to follow the right tunnel. I thought she was going to turn into a mole person, so I was a little disappointed that she was plopped back into the tunnel that takes her home. But, Jen has a good point about the ambiguity. Maybe Delilah doubts what had happened at the end to support that idea?
ReplyDeleteI've been reading a lot of "portal" stories recently (The Hazel Wood, Every Heart a Doorway) and wanted to give it a go. If I had a hundred more word with it, I was going to have it so her few hours (maybe days?) underground translated to almost ten years in the real world.
DeleteI liked all the details, but at the end I was wondering if it was real or not. I also thought she was going to become a mole person and go away with them, so just being led back to where she started confused me. I think finding out what she learned from this experience would have helped. Good job and thanks for sharing!
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